October 8th, 2005

Poem

Inside,

                 please look for

yourself,

                 my actual ability, not language,

lies

                 beneath the pictures I cannot show.

Beauty

                 locked within my soul.

Posted by MeganLeigh at 04:43 PM | 2 comments
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Comment posted on October 10th, 2005 at 09:01 PM
1. Voice: The cient is writing this piece.

2. Audience: I believe the audience is the client's friends and family.

3. Say Back: In this poem the client is trying to tell everyone that just because he/she has a communication disorder doesn't mean that he cannot accomplish other tasks.

4. Bless: Megan I feel that you put a lot of thought into these few words because as I read it I could tell that you really used your emotions. (or maybe that was just me getting all teary-eyed as I read it) I also like the way you used different colors in order for autism and language stand out.

5. Address: When I first started to read it I was not sure if I was supposed to read it all as one or if "inside yourself lies beauty" stood off from the other sentences. (After I read it once I understood it all went together!) So my suggestions would be mabye you could reorganize it in a way for everyone to know to read it as one whole thing. I think this would help others who are reading it.
Comment posted on October 10th, 2005 at 07:26 PM
1. The voice of this genre is clearly the voice of the client.
2. The intended audience for this particular genre is somewhat unclear. The way that this genre is worded it could be addressing the client's family and friends, a general audience, or possibly both.
3. I believe that the author is protraying the client's inner feelings about Autism. With this poem the author is painting a picture of how the client wants others around him to see him for what he is deep down inside instead of judging him by his language abilities.
4. I thought the poem was really orginal and flowed really well. I also thought joining of the saying "Inside yourself lies beauty" with your the rest of your poem was a great idea. I really liked the way you made the bold letters stand out and spell autism.
5. The only thing I saw that you may need to work on is the poem's intended audience, it was a little unclear as to who the poem was directed to.